Draft Begins...

Hey guys,
This is what i have got so far for my fan-fiction.
I'm twisting a bit of Two and A Half Men. Hopefully you guys have seen it a few times before so you'll be able to pick up on the tone for each character. My twist is Charlie realising that he is gay, you know how much of a player he is in the episodes, new girl everyday.
Let me know what you guys think, i'm prepared to take positives and negatives!

*____* = change of word


"...Um... where are you going?" Alan anxiously asked Charlie as he strolled out of the kitchen.
"I'm going out on a date" he confidently said, buttoning his freshly ironed shirt up.
"With who this time?" Alan *stated*.
"Alan, Alan, Alan..." He said walking him back in to the kitchen with his arm around him. "Do you remember that time in sixth grade, when you asked that girl out and she said no because she liked somebody else?"
"Yeah..Sarah Hoffmen, why whats your point Charlie?" He impatiently said.
"Well ah... I was the other guy." Alan's expression changed instantly, at the thought of his younger brother stealing the girl he liked. "Wait! You were the boy that bought her the flowers and chocolates , and had them delieverd to her in class that time!?" He said fuming.
"Yeah that was me..."
"And the time she said she couldn't come and study in the library with me because she was going to have an ice-cream with a friend, was that with you?"
"Yeah... that was me too..." Charlie said with ____________?
"Charlie how could you do that to me...? Alan dissapointedly said.
"Alan it was in the sixth grade, we were young and innocent! It was years ago."
"You're right it was a long time ago... i wonder what she's doing right now"Alan pondered in thought for a moment. "Well i'm going to get ready, glad i've got that off my chest" He made a quick dash for the stairs. Charlie was mid step when Alan wandered back into the lounge after him "Um Charlie, you didn't end up answering my question, who are you going out with tonight?" There was a silence...